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Fandom: Saiyuki
Title: Saiyuki/Batman crossover of doom part two
Rating: R
Pairing: Hakkai/Gojyo
Notes: Many thanks to [livejournal.com profile] emungere and [livejournal.com profile] new_kate for beta and comments.

Part one - (now with actual edits!)

Part two


'What's happening in this town?' Gojyo said. 'I've never seen this many goons around. It's like a plague.'

'You noticed?' Hakkai set his cup down and stared into it. 'There's a great deal of power gathering in the city. It seems to be grouping around one man. He calls himself the Joker.'

'That's a dumb name.'

'Quite,' said Hakkai, with a brief laugh. 'But he's very dangerous.'

'He jokes people to death? Don't tell me: he has a thing about packs of playing cards?'

Hakkai shook his head and smiled in such a painful way that Gojyo almost winced. It made him remember that he knew nothing at all about this man.

'He has a 'thing' about torturing young women.'

'Christ. So he's the one Sanzo's been going after recently?'

'Yes. With little success, I'm afraid.'

They were in what Hakkai called his 'own private living room' - a snug room lined with bookshelves. Gojyo wondered how many rooms this place had and how rich Sanzo must be. He wondered where Sanzo was or if he was even here. Sitting there, he realised how quiet the house was and also how still, as if it was listening for something. What a creepy place.

Gojyo didn't know what to think about any of it. Hakkai sipped his tea and watched him, sitting close by on the sofa, near enough that Gojyo could feel his heat. He wanted Hakkai again and he was having trouble stopping himself just leaning over, unzipping Hakkai's fly and blowing him right there, to let him fuck his mouth hard, down on his knees if that's what Hakkai wanted. His face flushed.

Instead, he copied Hakkai and drank more tea. He was getting a definite vibe that he should go. If Hakkai had wanted to do it again he was sure he'd still be up there now, stripped and sweating, not tidied up and fussed downstairs and given freaking tea in a flowery china cup.

There was no reason to hang around - his leg was completely healed and Hakkai hadn't asked him to stay. That was okay, he thought. Just a one time thing. Fine. A memory of Hakkai's lips on his ear, Hakkai inside him, whispering unbelievably filthy things came back to him so strongly that he almost gasped. He guessed it must be showing on his face, because Hakkai's green eyes fixed on his, wide and round and, worst, clearly not happy.

'Hakkai,' he began. Just say it. 'So-- do you want to get together again sometime?'

Hakkai's smile fixed. Shit. Gojyo was usually the one kicking them out afterwards, giving them the brush off. Hakkai had sounded keen enough upstairs, but people said anything when they were fucking. It probably hadn't meant anything.

'Gojyo. I-- I like you, very much so, but… '

Gojyo didn't want to hear the rest of it.

'Look, yeah. No worries. I'll see you around.'

He took a deep breath after the door had shut behind him. It hurt more than it should.


*


Sanzo crept along the wet granite ledge that ran around the rooftop. Streetlights shimmered far below, dim yellow specks in the fog that had settled, muffling the sound and movement of the city. He was alone, just him against the tide of evil that, like every other night this week, rampaged across the city. It was exactly the sort of night to fall off a slippery granite ledge and break a leg. He was thinking this when a hand slapped itself across his mouth, and another tightened like steel around his upper left arm.

'Mmmmphf!'

'If you take one more step you're gonna blow yourself into bat pieces,' a voice said in his ear. 'Over there, look,' and the hand yanked on his arm, hard enough to make him wince.

Sanzo tried to jerk away, but this bastard was amazingly strong and this wasn't a clever venue for all out wrestling. He recognised that voice. It was that oversexed cat fetishist from the other night. His butler had been acting strange ever since, alternating soft and dreamy smiles with the sound of crashing pottery in the kitchen.

'There,' the voice hissed. 'Be careful.'

He turned his head to look and saw the trip wire, glittering faintly with droplets of moisture. How could he have missed that? He felt himself being dragged back by powerful arms and pulled away, hard. The hands loosened but didn't let go.

'You again,' said Sanzo. 'I should've known you'd be back to cause trouble. Just keep your damn backing singers out of it this time. This is a serious operation.'

Gojyo glared at him. 'I just saved your ass!'

'I never asked you to. Just get out of here. Do you know what sort of danger you're in? This is no place for amateurs. Especially ones dressed like lap dancers.'

'I'm not an amateur, or a lap dancer. Although I could be for you. But thanks for the concern.'

'I'm not concerned,' Sanzo said, but it was drowned out by the steel door to the roof smashing open and a bellowing roar from the enormous, tentacled figure that lumbered out. A demon. He appeared to be waving in Sanzo's direction.

'Do you know him?' Gojyo said, just as helicopter blades screamed through the air above them.

'Moron.'

'He's going for the 'copter!' Gojyo said.

Sanzo hadn't thought the evening could go downhill, but it had. He was so close to catching the idiot with the stupid name-- whoever called themselves something like the Joker anyway? Now his plan to catch the tentacle goon and extort information was about to turn into another mess. He saw Gojyo drop to an alert crouch next to him and, annoyed as he was, there was still a part of his brain telling him to pay attention to how his catsuit clung to his thighs and crotch. Sanzo dragged his eyes away with a grimace, and then immediately forgot all that. Gojyo had leapt forward and was running at the hulking, odd shaped figure, twirling his chain and making loud whooping cries.

'Oh for god's sake,' he said, and ran, hoping to cut him off and save him from the worst of it. He only remembered the wire when it was far too late.

He was flying, and a tearing shriek ripped the air apart. The world was nothing but black and red shadows and everything was hot, much too hot. He didn't remember much else after that, except the sensation of falling and falling, impossibly slowly, with arms wrapped tightly round him and a voice in his ear telling him to hold on.


*



Gojyo waited in Sanzo's enormous, stainless-steel-filled kitchen, half wanting to run out the back door. He'd found Sanzo's car, a weird looking souped-up Jeep. Hakkai's voice on the other end of the phone had been calm and pleasant and had sent an instant tingling rush down his spine.

However many times he might have relived that night in the past few weeks, he wasn't going to come on like some needy chick. Why didn't you phone me. You said you wanted me. He cringed. He didn't need anyone that bad.

Except he hadn't thought of anything else since, and hadn't been with anyone either. Too many nights it had been just him and his hand, working himself into a sweat over Hakkai's smile. No, he wasn't thinking about that, not now. Hakkai's warm weight on him, moving inside him, that mouth at his ear and the things it said, soft beautiful things about wanting him. He clamped down on the memory like a guilty secret. Whatever he'd said that night, Hakkai hadn't got in touch since and it was clear he wasn't interested. So Gojyo was going to let this one go. Yeah, he would.

The door swung open, and Hakkai walked in. He smiled coolly, like he'd never pinned Gojyo down and fucked him into a sweaty heap, like they'd never even met before. Gojyo stood up straighter.

'Hi,' he said, going for cool but hitting strangled.

'You rescued him this time,' Hakkai said. He was carrying a tray of bandages and a plastic bowl of bloody water. 'You're turning into quite a little team.'

'Me and him? I don't think so.'

'Thank you anyway,' and Hakkai's smile was suddenly so warm and knowing it made Gojyo's stomach do a victory backflip.

'No need to thank me. I woulda done it for anyone,' Gojyo said, staring and yet incapable of stopping.

The tray rattled on the gleaming counter as Hakkai placed it carefully down, then water swished into the sink, splattering on the bright steel as Hakkai rinsed the bowl.

'So,' he said. He didn't have a clue what to say next. 'You okay?' He winced. That sounded dumb.

'Very well, thank you, Mr Sha,' Hakkai said, wiping his hands dry.

Mr Sha? Gojyo's smile vanished. 'Hey, I thought we got past all that formality,' he said, making his voice light, like it was a joke. I thought you'd been looking for me all your life, was what he didn't say.

Hakkai froze, and Gojyo was instantly sorry.

'No,' Hakkai said, just like that.

What was that supposed to mean? Hakkai wasn't smiling anymore and when he raised his eyes he looked just like the sheepish looking man who'd asked Gojyo if he was all right afterwards.

'This is awkward,' Hakkai said, twisting a dishrag between his fingers. 'I know you might have expected something from me, after we- '

He can't even say it, Gojyo thought. He went cold. The urge to run out the door grew stronger.

'There are reasons, ah, why, although I'd like to, very much like to, it's simply impossible.'

'Simply impossible to-- do me?' Gojyo said.

Hakkai's eyes darkened as they fixed on Gojyo. He wet his lips. 'That's a very good way of putting it.'

The air in the room seemed to thin out, and Gojyo became very aware of his own body and just how tight his clothes were.

'So,' he cleared his throat. 'Why not? Don't tell me you're a monk or something. 'Cos it didn't seem that way the other night.'

'Not that, no.'

Gojyo moved nearer, until they were nearly chest to chest. Hakkai didn't back away, but his throat flexed as he swallowed. 'Good,' Gojyo said. 'It'd be a crime against all things pornographic if you were.'

Hakkai's lips were so soft, so gentle on his own, clinging and pulling away again. Hakkai was holding back, Gjoyo could tell, but that was okay, because it let Gojyo tease him, just catching his lip between his own, using his breath and letting the tip of his tongue graze along Hakkai's lips until they parted and Hakkai pressed up close with a short, breathy moan. Strong hands closed over his shoulders but then Hakkai pulled away, leaving soft kisses behind. 'No-- Gojyo-- '

'Hmmm? Don't-- oh-- don't stop.'

Then he was being pushed firmly back. Hakkai folded his arms tightly across his chest, tension stiffening his spine. Bright flushes ran across his cheeks

'Gojyo. There's something I should tell you.'

Gojyo nodded. 'Okay.' Hakkai's lips were red against his pale skin, swollen looking.

'About me. I'm abnormal.'

Gojyo stared. 'Well, yeah, you work as a magical-healing-powers butler for a crime fighting bat-guy. And who are you talking to?' he spread his hands and gestured at himself. 'Do I look like I work nine to five? Abnormal. I'd be more worried if you thought you were Mr Average.'

Hakkai's fingers were white at the knuckles. 'No, not like that,' and his voice made Gojyo flinch. It was tight, so stretched it sounded like his vocal chords might snap. 'Me,' he ground out and his face looked cracked and broken. 'It's me, inside, what I am. I'm wrong. In here,' and he thumped a fist against his chest. He met Gojyo's eyes. 'You should keep away.'


*



He didn't want to. He knew that. But on his way home, the kitchen door firmly locked and bolted behind him and Hakkai's face set like iron, he realised he had no way of even getting in contact with him, unless he asked Pissyface to pass on a message, and that was as likely as said Pissyface inviting him in for tea, biscuits and nice chat about the weather. Hakkai didn't want to see him. Maybe he should stay away, like Hakkai wanted. He should go back to his life, even if everything seemed just that little bit more pointless.

Inside, he'd said. Gojyo didn't think Hakkai wasn't sick, at least not in body. Maybe in mind. Maybe Sanzo fed him happy pills. The set up with Sanzo was definitely weird, like Sanzo had some sort of power over him. Gojyo remembered reading in some celebrity rag that Bat-Features had trained to be a doctor. He remembered the picture: Sanzo looking miserable and angry, even back then.

Whatever his personality problems were, Batman was suddenly all over town, kicking the asses of every crook he could lay his manicured hands on. Often, Gojyo would just happen to be there too, helping. The cat boys were getting seriously pissed off with the whole situation. Gojyo had stopped taking them out so much since he realised he did better on his own. Did better with Sanzo.

'Where the hell have you been?' Benny asked him. He had dark hair in plaits that made him look like a reject from Pocohontas. 'Because I'm really starting to feel you're not committed to us anymore, you know?'

The others nodded.

'Yeah. You and this Bat guy,' Zed sneered, folding his beefy arms across his chest. 'You got something going on with him?'

'What? No way,' he said. 'Look. Guys. Maybe it's time for us to go in different directions, you know? Spend some time apart. Explore other avenues.'

Benny flung up his hands. 'Oh. I see. You're dumping us for him. What's he offered you- position of first sidekick? God, you're so predictable. It's like Wolverine all over again.'

'It is not,' he snapped. 'It's nothing to do with Sanzo,' he went on. 'I want some time alone. I just feel-- ' He didn't know how he felt.

'You are so dumping us! I can hear it in your voice.'

Gojyo wondered if it was worth lying any more. 'Yeah.'

'He's got a sidekick already,' Jamie said, his voice rising from the depths of the sofa. He was lying on his back reading Hello, his long legs dangling over the sofa arm.

'No shit? Who?' said Gojyo.

'A kid. His ward, they say. He's not around much 'cos they send him to this special school out in the country. But he comes back sometimes. Wears yellow tights. Strong enough to rip your arms off if he felt like it. Scary.' Jamie grinned, showing lots of teeth.

'No shit,' Gojyo said again. He felt sorry for the little snot already. Having Sanzo as your parent must really suck.

'You can't go!' Benny said. 'Not now. We're sold out for next Friday at the Atomic Ballroom. They're coming to film us and everything. You can't let us down,' Benny said. His hands were clenched. 'It's our big break,' he whispered.

'You know I was never in it for that shit. Oh, Jesus. Don't cry,' Gojyo muttered. 'Please.'

'Do it for us,' Zed whispered, his goatee trembling.

'You'd better do it,' Jamie murmured, 'or you'll never see your second-best catsuit again.'

Gojyo sighed. It wasn't worth the drama. 'Okay. But after that we're through.'

Benny let out a sob.


*



'You'd better tell him,' Hakkai said. He held out a silver tray. In the middle sat a sleek black phone. 'It'll only cause upset if you tell him on Friday.'

Sometimes Sanzo hated his butler, but he was right. Sanzo put his paper down and grabbed the phone, stabbing at the speed dial.

'Sanzo!' said a loud voice on the other end, made tinny by distance. 'What's going on? D'you need me to come back to town?'

'Goku. Listen well because I'm only going to say this once. You are not going to see that damned band on Friday.'

'What?' The voice rang with disbelief. 'But I already paid for a ticket.'

'Get a refund. I don't care.'

'I've been planning this for weeks!'

'You're not going. Get used to it.'

'There's no way you can stop me. I'll do what I like.'

'No, you won't. Until you're 18 you do as I say,' Sanzo bellowed. 'That means no eyeliner, either.'

'I hate you so much! That's so unfai-- '

Sanzo jabbed the end call button, then sat staring at it until Hakkai took it gently from him.

'That went well,' Hakkai said. 'Would you like dinner now?'

'Yeah, I suppose so. Hakkai,' he forced himself to say, as Hakkai moved away. 'Are you-- I mean, have you seen him again?'

He trusted Hakkai to understand what he meant without actually having to say it. It was a blessing, sometimes.

'Mr Sha?' Hakkai's brows lifted. 'Of course not.'

'Hmmph.'

It wasn't really good news.

Date: 2005-11-21 02:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] wildelamassu.livejournal.com
Funny and hot. You win. ♥

Date: 2005-11-22 08:56 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] louiselux.livejournal.com
Thank you! I'm really glad you like it.

Date: 2005-11-21 02:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] new-kate.livejournal.com
It's here! It's out! *flails*
Awesome. So much love.

Date: 2005-11-22 08:56 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] louiselux.livejournal.com
Hee! Thanks so much! I've been writing more too, so yay!

Date: 2005-11-21 02:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mistressrenet.livejournal.com
HAKKAI YOU MORON.

Sneak off and see the band, Goku! You know you want to!

Date: 2005-11-21 02:45 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mistressrenet.livejournal.com
Also, the second time around I caught "That means no eyeliner." I LOVE YOU.

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Date: 2005-11-21 04:06 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] baka-gaijin.livejournal.com
omg.. just re-read part one and ... omg.. yes you so WIN. Nobody writes a better sex scene then you. And you made Hakkai so believably in-charge and yet so vulnerable.

~ whimpers ~

oh, and Goku + eyeliner....

~ dies ~

Date: 2005-11-22 08:59 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] louiselux.livejournal.com
Thank you very much indeed!

Goku is at that experimental stage...

Date: 2005-11-21 06:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] andmydog.livejournal.com
Oh, fuck, you're writing more! Yes!

Dammit, Hakkai, quit flagellating yourself - let the nice kitty help!


'No, you won't. Until you're 18 you do as I say,' Sanzo bellowed. 'That means no eyeliner, either.'

Whoa. XD

Date: 2005-11-22 09:08 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] louiselux.livejournal.com
Hopefully he'll stop self-flagellating at some point, the schmuck.

Glad you're enjoying it - thank you!

Date: 2005-11-21 08:15 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] nightfallrising.livejournal.com
Prereading squee!!

Date: 2005-11-22 09:09 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] louiselux.livejournal.com
Hee! Also, yay!

Date: 2005-11-21 10:06 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hibem.livejournal.com
I love this sooo much. Gojyo is the dirtiest romantic ever. Perfection. His band mates are awesome and Goku as the rebellious ward makes me so happy. "I hate you so much!" Yes! Is it wrong of me to hope he as long-haired, super-strong best friend/room mate/crush out at that private school?
And now there's plot! And angst! Oh! I can't wait for more!

Date: 2005-11-22 09:27 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] louiselux.livejournal.com
Thanks so very much! Goku is such a brat in this - and yes, he may well have super strong best friend. ;D

Date: 2005-11-21 10:12 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] nightfallrising.livejournal.com
Preplot! Does that mean more's coming?

Date: 2005-11-22 09:29 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] louiselux.livejournal.com
It does indeed. Probably another 2 or 3 parts, I think.

Date: 2005-11-21 10:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aqua-eyes.livejournal.com
LOL! Love it. *____* There was tenticles, and angsty! and bitchiness. And eyeliner. all good stuff. *____*

Might even have to watch something batman related...

Date: 2005-11-22 09:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] louiselux.livejournal.com
Thanks very much.

As to the Batman-ness of this crossover, it's very slight really, but anything with Catwoman might be inspiring for how I imagine Gojyo's look, or Emma Peel from the 1960s Avengers. I always imagine Sanzo having the full bulletproof bat armour look going on, rather than the tights and underpants.

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Date: 2005-11-21 11:24 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] emungere.livejournal.com
&hearts!!

Date: 2005-11-22 09:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] louiselux.livejournal.com
*hearts*

I've written another 2500 words of it now - I'm unstoppable on the batsmut.

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Date: 2005-11-22 03:39 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] wk-recomend.livejournal.com
Oh my god I love you.

I think you just made my week. ^_____^

Thank you!

D

PS -- Don't tell me you're a monk or something. 'Cos it didn't seem that way the other night.'

'Not that, no.'

Gojyo moved nearer, until they were nearly chest to chest. Hakkai didn't back away, but his throat flexed as he swallowed. 'Good,' Gojyo said. 'It'd be a crime against all things pornographic if you were.'


My favorite part. Again, I love you. Go team! ~_^

Date: 2005-11-22 09:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] louiselux.livejournal.com
Thsnk you so very much. I'm really glad to hear you liked it.

Date: 2005-11-22 03:59 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] toscas-kiss.livejournal.com
Eeeee! Hakkai you idiot! We You want more hot GojyoSex!!!
Loved this - hysterically funny (eyeliner!) and can't wait to see what happens. :-D

Date: 2005-11-23 03:53 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] louiselux.livejournal.com
Hee. Don't we all!

Glad you enjoyed it - thankS ;D

Date: 2005-11-22 06:44 am (UTC)
ext_15708: (hakkai_oh really?)
From: [identity profile] kanzenhanzai.livejournal.com
Stopping? What's with this stopping stuff? Ah, poop.
(I've been thouroughly *re*-sucked into this AU!)

Date: 2005-11-23 03:54 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] louiselux.livejournal.com
Thanks! There will be more, have no fear.

Date: 2005-11-22 08:40 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] trensaddiction.livejournal.com
Sanzo having to have a tripwire pointed out to him by Gojyo was simply beyond priceless. And that is only one of so many witty and amusing moments in this piece... An altogether fun read. =)

Date: 2005-11-23 03:54 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] louiselux.livejournal.com
Thank you so much!

Date: 2005-11-23 05:25 am (UTC)
indelicateink: squee! (saiyuki gojyo squee)
From: [personal profile] indelicateink
Oh my GOD this is so well done. I am thrilled beyond description that there's now more. And more pending. Guh.

I love their voices. (Do I look like I work nine to five? snuck up and made me laugh out loud.) The seamless and creative melding of the two universes is genius. And Goku's introduction: awesome. Can I just love on you for awhile? Thank you.

Date: 2005-11-23 03:55 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] louiselux.livejournal.com
Hee! Thanks - I'm really really pleased you're enjoying it!

Date: 2005-11-23 07:54 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] wedjateye.livejournal.com
Awwww, crap, why'd it have to end already? Glad to see you're hard at work writing more. I'm insatiable. Which is all your fault. Hakkai, hurry up and get a clue/get over it or whatever, or I'll don a suit of some sort and kick your butt. Pissyface - makes me laugh every time. :)

Date: 2005-11-23 03:56 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] louiselux.livejournal.com
Hakkai really needs a cluephone, it's true. Glad you're enjoying it - thank you :D

Date: 2005-11-23 09:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] elfiepike.livejournal.com
.... heeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee. i wish i had some coherency to offer you, but thinking about gojyo in a catsuit kinda takes away that ability. ♥

Date: 2005-11-24 10:51 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] louiselux.livejournal.com
It does indeed! Thanks very much - glad you're enjoying it.

Date: 2005-11-28 05:47 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] daegaer.livejournal.com
Yay! I had missed this when you posted it, and it's wonderful to read it now! Poor Hakkai! Poor Gojyo! Hee for Bat!Sanzo!

And I love the Catboys :-)

Date: 2005-11-29 12:47 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] louiselux.livejournal.com
Yay! Thank you. The Catboys are very special.

Date: 2005-12-01 08:31 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cicer.livejournal.com
D'oh! How did I miss this last week? I guess my NaNoWriMo fervor had a stronger hold on me than I thought! But really, when I'm so busy I miss Batsmut, that's just wrong.

Whee, I love this part! *dies* Goku in eyeliner is the best image ever. And the Hakkai/Gojyo interaction is the best. Love it! *skips off the read the next part*

Date: 2005-12-01 11:04 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] louiselux.livejournal.com
Yay! *is happy*

Goku and his banned eyeliner still makes me laugh too - I bet he looks so cute.

Date: 2005-12-03 06:06 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kintail.livejournal.com
Awesome chapter, great balance of ouch and funny. And the Batmobile is Jeep! *wonders who Joker might be* And Sanzo needs to let up about the eyeliner. *goes looking for more, again!*

Date: 2005-12-07 08:04 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] louiselux.livejournal.com
Thank you!

Date: 2005-12-06 05:17 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lili-mai.livejournal.com
Well my good friend D has gotten me hooked on this stuff and i love it. I think my favorite part is the referal to Wolverine...you rock. Yey on to read the next section.

Date: 2005-12-07 08:05 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] louiselux.livejournal.com
Thanks!

Gojyo's so over Wolverine these days, now he's got Hakkai to obsess over. *g*

Date: 2005-12-11 07:06 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] nekonexus.livejournal.com
You have this marvellous knack for the lines that trigger that painful tightness in the chest of angst and unrequited emotion. Maybe it's because with Saiyuki, we kind of expect Hakkai and Gojyo to just be there for each other all the time (regardless of the rest of their relationship), and this... the distance is painful, and the awkwardness is... ow. Really ow.

And then of course the snicker-ific moments like the eyeliner and Wolverine *smirk* and Sanzo is so going to be kicking himself/pissed with Gojyo for that tripwire incident. :p

Poor Goku. ~_~ Having gotten to indulge in a concert friday night unexpectedly, I feel his pain. (ok, that seems backwards, but really. umm... yeah. brain melt.)

Date: 2005-12-14 12:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] louiselux.livejournal.com
Sorry for the delay in replying - I was really thrilled to get all your comments on the fic. I'm glad the emotional impact of the Gojyo/Hakkai relationship is working. I think they both need to realise that they need each other. Maybe Sanzo will bat-kick some sense into them? *g*

Date: 2006-07-07 10:22 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kispexi2.livejournal.com
Another really satisfying chapter. The tension between Hakkai and Gojyo was beautifully done - it made me hold my breath. Gojyo's inner voice is so strong and involving.

I smirked a lot at the cat boys. They were so very funny. And your wonderful little throw-away lines - It's like Wolverine all over again - *snort*. The scene with the boys really highlighted Gojyo's character too, his desire for independence combined with such a soft heart. Lovely.

I really enjoyed the sniping between Gojyo and Sanzo. It was so utterly in character.

Plus That means no eyeliner, either. Hee!!

Date: 2010-05-14 04:45 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] akira17.livejournal.com
loveing this hardcore

somehow this line about hakkai strikes me as increadibly sad
His butler had been acting strange ever since, alternating soft and dreamy smiles with the sound of crashing pottery in the kitchen.

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