raven locks

Gosh, If I never read another piece of fanfiction that involves the words 'slender', 'tawny', 'raven' and 'locks' I will die a happy woman, but somehow I don't think it's going to happen. I just read a most annoying story on a list. Annoying because it was overblown and overwritten. The two characters were supposed to be only 12, but came across as 42. I was contemplating the dullness of Celine Dion's voice the other night, and started wondering what it was about her singing that gave the kiss of death to any potentially interesting tune. I think it's because she puts everything she has into it, and ends up killing any subtlety one might hope to find in the lyric or music. Overwriting has a similar effect. Lots of description, but it doesn't bring the story to life. A sort of over-earnest tone that ends up sounding adolescent.