I usually don't like the way this pairing is written, because most people turn either man into a -girl-, which I hate. But you do it so well, and staying within the bounds of the established characters we all know and love. Well done (and hot to boot). ;) See, I'm trying to be all literary in the face of smut instead of just going squee like any normal person. :D

I like the bit at the end, especially "the Look", I can so see Hakkai trying to puzzle him out.